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« on: 04 June 2011, 13:31:45 »

Well I decided to head into town to see if I could find a caravan or travelling companion to accompany south.  As I wandered around town I found myself in a run down section of the city.  At first I thought I was alone but then I began to hear strange noises like scurrying and laughing and low voices.  I turned a corner and caught a quick glimpse of a rodent disappearing into the sewers. But the voices kept haunting me. I was at a loss ...and then I spotted one, Rat Brownie.

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« Reply #1 on: 04 June 2011, 14:16:45 »

Looks great to me, Seeker. What is that coloured set of balls (or whatever it is) at the Rat Brownie's side?
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« Reply #2 on: 04 June 2011, 14:48:07 »

 :D  That's just awesome, Seeker.  A nbig Bownie sized aura for this one!  Love his little feirce expression.
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« Reply #3 on: 04 June 2011, 15:45:42 »

Hey Seeker, you made me smile, that was a great start in the day! :D

Nevertheless, the critic is rolling! ;)

Finishing touches are still needed, yes? (Frame, bricks, rat)
- the bricks are at some places to smooth, the line to straight

Some questions:

 Is it your intent, that this little fellow has a hunchback? Otherwise the arms would need to be a little differently attached to the body.

How does the Brownie reign the rat? Is there nothing around the nose?

The rat and Brownie look as if the ventured in a well of region, the bricks and the plaster in between is so clean!
Hey, now I can say...add mud and dirt to your lovely clean wall! (I think you know , what I mean ;) )

OK, now to lift your mood again: :)

The expression on his face is great, how he peers under his fruit-hat to view the street! And I love the quiver, so unergonomic - a thimble? And what is that white round topped arrow (looks a bit like a q-tip  buck) ?


I love the whole layout! Maybe make it a bit dirtier, the rat looks to nice, but otherwise,  thumbup
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« Reply #4 on: 04 June 2011, 15:48:34 »

...Will he attack me if I go "Aww"?

Great picture Seeker.

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« Reply #5 on: 04 June 2011, 16:29:37 »

Just a thought...

When I first saw the pic, my first thought was that what it needs is a full sized person peering through the window with a surprised expression....



Talia, I thought the same thing at first, that the Brownie was a hunchback, but upon closer inspection noticed that it is the curtain.  There is a definite, but very fine, colour difference and line there if you look closely enough. 
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« Reply #6 on: 04 June 2011, 16:44:22 »

I love it! You'll have made one Rookie a very happy Brownie, once she sees this. Aura +!

Also, Rat Brownies are supposed to be somewhat... misshapen, lets say. So a hunchback is quite possible!
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« Reply #7 on: 04 June 2011, 20:11:23 »

When I first saw the pic, my first thought was that what it needs is a full sized person peering through the window with a surprised expression....

I think that's a great idea. And I share Talia's thoughts about the wall.

But what a fantastic picture it already is. In honour of Rookie, I'll give Seeker a Brownie point, rather than aura.
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« Reply #8 on: 04 June 2011, 21:55:28 »

Another great picture Seeker.

The only thing that I noticed that is problematic is that it appears to be daytime in the photo.  Rat Brownies, particularly the Mud Rat Brownie which you seem to be depicting, generally tend to prefer to stay in the dark.  During the day, they remain below ground and only venture out of the sewers at night time.  
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« Reply #9 on: 04 June 2011, 22:02:40 »

Brilliant pic, I have to agree, and aura +1, Seeker! I think the fur is still a bit sketchy at parts, maybe that can be adjusted a bit, but I like everything else! Wonderful job, Seeker!  thumbup
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« Reply #10 on: 04 June 2011, 23:28:01 »

Oh how cute! Yay for Brownies, that makes us Brownie devs very happy to see our babies illustrated. Did you know the Brownie rat was my very first entry before I became an apprentice? How far I've come.

One suggestion is to perhaps make the rat a little more skinnier and malnourished?
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« Reply #11 on: 05 June 2011, 00:41:38 »

Oh well, Drasil, could be a Rat Brownie forced into dayight due to certain circumstances, otherwise it would be to dark for Seeker to see it anyway.
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« Reply #12 on: 05 June 2011, 03:39:37 »

Oh well, Drasil, could be a Rat Brownie forced into dayight due to certain circumstances, otherwise it would be to dark for Seeker to see it anyway.

Fair point, though I still don't think having a Rat Brownie sauntering around in broad daylight stays true to the entry.  How about a compromise and just adjust the lighting so that it appears to be dusk or dawn?  That way Seeker has a reason to have seen a Rat Brownie while keeping true to the tribe's description as nocturnal creatures. 
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« Reply #13 on: 05 June 2011, 06:19:06 »

I can easily mes with the lighting to see what comes of it.  Perhaps a candle or something somewhere will help to preserve some for the colors.  I'll try something.
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« Reply #14 on: 07 June 2011, 01:55:18 »

He's awesome!  I don't know how you've managed to capture that wonderful expression on his face - it's brilliantly evil and mischevious, just so exactly how i'd imagine a Mud Rat Brownie expression.

I like the suggestions from Talia and Alt: i.e. making it more dawn/dusk time and having that human face at the window.  However, if either of them detract from that expression on the Rat Brownie's face, then I reckon leave it as it is!  You could also, as Talia suggests, pop in some reins or a collar for steering the rat - maybe a collar would also allow you a bit more scope for defining the fur, as it would ruffle up the dirty hairs? (This could help make the rat look a bit more malnorished too?) Completely up to you though, as it could be steered by leaning to one side or by voice commands instead.

Could you just mention that this is a Mud Rat Brownie somewhere (it can be in the picture caption rather than the title if easier) - there are a few different types of Rat Brownie and they can look like anything really.

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