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Deklitch Hardin
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« on: 10 January 2012, 13:39:17 »
This is a traditional song sung by the Black Butterfly Rovers about the God, Nehtor. The bands of individuals seen by others as miscreants, outlaws and worse reflect on Nehtor in his identity as the Weeping God, and the God Alone. It serves as an additional sign, along with the black butterfly tattoo each member of the troops get when they become a fully fledged member. Parts of the song are changed to reflect the events in the Black Butterfly Rover's own life, and parts of it remain constant between singers.

The version of the song here is the one sang by the Erpheronian, Deklitch Hardin, who grew up a Black Butterfly Rover before being introduced to the Compendium by elven and human compendiumists while he was passing through Marcogg with his troop. These songs are highly personal and individualistic, and the Compendium is most grateful to the Compendiumist for sharing it with us.

Great Lord Nehtor, Dance
There is a God, named Nehtor and he weeps with you
In robes so blue
With dark hair and beard, and a pan flute, too
His robes are blue
He leapt so high,
He touched the sky,
Then he lightly touched down

Great God Nehtor,
God who Weeps,
God of Healing, Dance!

I first knew Him when I was in a Province,
As a Rover child
Mum had died, dad had lied and I had cried
Nehtor wept with me,
He wept with me,
Then he stepped closer

He said His name was Nehtor, then He danced a bit
Across the field
He flicked his head, hitched his robes, and he grinned
Then He leapt up high, until I smiled,
He reached for me,
He reached for me,
held me till my tears ceased

Great God Nehtor,
God who Weeps,
God of Healing, dance!

He danced when the Rovers laughed or when we cried
As we travelled around,
We spoke with tears of countless years and endless fears
Going through village and town,
When things went missing, we were blamed, and we cried,
And with us He wept

Great God Nehtor,
God who Weeps,
God of Healing, dance!
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« Reply #1 on: 10 January 2012, 16:33:17 »
Hey!  I have an illustration for this.... :)
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« Reply #2 on: 12 January 2012, 08:27:15 »
It was that illustration that inspired the process of me coming up with this, Judith. :)

Edit: The poem/song is mostly there now. I'm satisfied with some of it ... I'm not happy with some of it. I invite comments, suggestions etc on it.

Edit II: I admit to borrowing the tune for this one from a real life song, kudos to anyone who picks it up ... trying to get the rhythm right in places was quite difficult, as were rhymes. :)
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« Reply #3 on: 12 January 2012, 12:22:51 »
Haha! Great allusion! clap I loved the original song growing up.
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« Reply #4 on: 13 January 2012, 01:45:07 »
I learned to play guitar with that song! Looking good, Dek!
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« Reply #5 on: 13 January 2012, 15:28:08 »
May I suggest 'leapt' rather than 'jumped' as a substitution?  Two reasons - first,  it's more medieval-sounding ('jumped' has a certain modern crudeness about it) and second, 'leapt' has a nice assonance and internal rhyme with 'wept', which you use several times in the poem.

Apart from that I would change nothing - it's simple without being simplistic, personal, and effective!
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« Reply #6 on: 15 January 2012, 18:10:04 »
Thanks all for your thoughts on it. I've just realised now it didn't have the ! on it, so I've now fixed that up.
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« Reply #7 on: 15 January 2012, 23:13:40 »
(sneaks in to aurie Dek)
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« Reply #8 on: 22 January 2012, 05:14:00 »
Is this one ready to be blarrowed and for inclusion in the current update?

PS Thanks for the aura, Bard.
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« Reply #9 on: 22 January 2012, 17:34:04 »
Will be included, yup!  cool
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